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Sometimes, when the air is warm,
And fermentation drowns the dawn,
Whispers float from rooms above,
Sing echos of your sleepy love.
©2009 ~becesque
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Who says ghosts don't exist?

Please note, if you read this yesterday it said "sickly love" rather than "sleepy love". I'd posted the old version. Duh, Bec.

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:iconnomikins:
It makes me feel like there are ghosts in the attic, love it.

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Before you criticize someone, you should walk a mile in their shoes. That way, when you criticize them, you're a mile away and you have their shoes :giggle:
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Your imagery is both beautiful to read and visualize. Bravo!
:iconbecesque:
Thank you very much! How nice of you to say so.

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~All in all you're just another brick in the wall~
:iconfaulky:
I've wanted to write a poem called 'Ghost' for a long time. But never wrote anything worthy of the title. You beat me to it!

I love it. especially 'and fermentation drowns the dawn' (and to think I just quoted a quarter of the poem!). but the rest also. My new manuscript draws upon ghosts a lot - not literal so much. Ghosts stand out to me for their symbolism - psychological ghosts if you will. though some days I think I, shall we say unexplained presences?

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My dear Aunt Augusta, I mean he was found out! The doctors found out that Bunbury could not live, that is what I mean - so Bunbury died
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Thank you, Faulks! It is rather short, more of a sentence rather than a poem, though I felt anything further would have subtracted from the simplicity of what I wanted to portray, so I left it!
This isn't about literal ghosts, but also the ghostly memories that remain when people leave us, not necessarily through death. I wanted it to be a happy thing. Well, perhaps not happy as such, just not sad.

I look forward to your 'Ghost' title when you write something you like to go below it! Also thank you for the little yellow star :D

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~All in all you're just another brick in the wall~
:iconfaulky:
Less is more, they say. that's certainly the case here. also I had a typo before. I should have said 'I think I feel, shall we say.' *slaps self in face*

Literal ghosts are kind of finite, so it's more fun to play around with the ideas they present :)

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My dear Aunt Augusta, I mean he was found out! The doctors found out that Bunbury could not live, that is what I mean - so Bunbury died
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Ha, I figured it out. There's no need for self-harm! And as far as spirits and ghosts are concerned, they are something I believe in wholeheartedly.

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~All in all you're just another brick in the wall~

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